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This is another one I gave up on early, I’m afraid. The problem this time? This is one of those stories that starts off with the player character being thrown through incomprehensible situations, having all sorts of unexplained physical sensations (smells, jolts of energy, bursts of light, hallucinated verbal messages), and generally being bullied this way and that by psychic phenomena. And I can’t help feeling that this is the author’s way of killing time: that he doesn’t know what is actually going on in his story, or, if he does, he doesn’t know how to get it rolling.
And, oh, besides that: comma splices, typos, the fact that I’m wearing a space suit and carrying a samurai sword.